slint writing

This is some of my latest silent writing.It may still have some spelling errors but hope you enjoy it.

The golden unicorn

Creak went the old iron gates as I opened the stable door.  The smell of hay accompanied by the gentle nicker  greeted me as I walked through the gate to the stalls.  As I walked pasted the stalls all the mars poked their heads out and gave me a gentle nudge and even the naughty filly that nips at your pockets gave me a nudge and I gave her an apple well I gave all the meas an apple that was why I was walking down the aisle  but I gave the filly and big apple for being so good.  I turned to go back and muck out the dirty brown hay that is in the stall for sick , injured or birthing mars but something caught my  eye.   I stepped over to the stall that was always open and empty but saw a golden unicorn she open her mouth and...
Thanks for reading. I am really proud of this story because it uses some show not tell.